A HAT
a space over head
covers hair
wooden block shapes it
cold blocking
empty measured
scissors cut
as thoughts be trimmed
A CIGARETTE
in her mouth
if not for Bansack
would not be rolled
then zippo lit
Columbus curse inhaled
taste it on her kiss
ash licks to a memory
AUTOMOBILE
Chieftan 6 cylinder
automatic interior lighting
vibrant in its red
the look of Harley Earl
comfort seats
full of knowledgeable
embrace
tactile so tactile
BABY
biological act
consummation
drawn by Da Vinci
exploited for love
apparent from conception
by automobile
another human form
original in cellular signature
TRADE
each item traded
with intrinsic worth
hat given away
more cigarettes bought
automobile traded
for another without memory
baby given to a couple out
of state who are unable to
manufacture
Very impressive.
Great build! This works really well.
This is very interesting how the pieces fit together by the time we read the last part. What a commentary on our tims, indeed. I think the supremely objective way you voice the pieces makes it work, and bybthe end it is like a bit of mechanical necessity that brings these things about, which of course it is not. Thoughtful and provocative.
Quite clever response to the prompt as you dissect these modern aspects of reality.
Wonderful medley here – a round as it were, of various words phrases objects. Works really well. k.
Very clever, the way you pull the strings together in the final stanza.
Your succinct and pithy approach to poetry is very attractive. Thanks for visiting my blog.
You build this well to the end punch in the gut, I agree with Brian about your approach. Very nicely done!
i like how you switch in each stanza from the real to the surreal…from the surface to the depth..very cool
nice…i like your deconstructionist approach to this and the minimalism to each segment…the baby one struck me the most…the exploited…and drawn by da vinci…both carry weight for me on the attitudes that surround them…