Sot and the Harlot

Posted: August 17, 2012 in Uncategorized
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the paper of my skin belied a truth

all desire can be sought in the heart

birds bend boughs sing there covenant to me

smile i spit at those lies my heart remains enflamed engorged

the ribald cock in my loins will not decay

measure moments as my skin begins to fall

bone steady mast unleashes ragged careworn sail

wenches wrenched birth as memory to me

 

 

for @dVersePoets an attempt at a huitain never trained in the forms more an experiment

Comments
  1. love these lines. Especially

    birds bend boughs sing there covenant to me

    smile i spit at those lies my heart remains enflamed engorged

    Wow. The whole thing is a WOW.

  2. go1flo says:

    Ribald cock… bone steady mast…. what are we reading here, sir? :-)

  3. I too loved the opening and it’s certainly an interesting write, with touch of angst therein!

  4. Mary says:

    An interesting Huitain. I read this as a fairly pessimistic view of aging. I wonder if that was your intent. So nice to meet you at dVerse.

  5. The more you get used to working in form, the more you’ll enjoy it. It’s a lesson in a sort of discipline, (and heaven knows I eschewed it for YEARS), but the beauty of realizing form is that you begin to understand the music in poetic communication, not just the music in your head and heart, but that like other musical instruments, the sound of the spoken word is one as well and has set rules in how to convey that music — once it is accomplished it is also very freeing..a paradox of sorts!

    Besides the form this poem owes a lot to other devices – notably metaphor and layerings of connotations surrounding human anatomy and physiology which here symbolize much more. This is the explication of a truth that when one connects intimately one has so much more invested than in a quick libido fix! I liked the way you remolded this to fit your words. Keep applying what you know with what you learn — it will yield great poetry.

  6. Patti says:

    Interesting use of the form. Women have their own form of hoping time will be kind.

  7. Claudia says:

    ha…this is an intriguing write for sure..

  8. mobius faith says:

    Some wonderful lines here.

  9. ManicDdaily says:

    Wonderful opening especially. The rest, I must confess, may be more meaningful to a male reader – I found it quite powerful, but I suspect the lines would deeply resonate with someone like my husband. k.

  10. hypercryptical says:

    Intriguing indeed!

    Anna :o]

  11. sarangirl says:

    I don’t know nothing about form, but I do know feel and this oozes it.

  12. brian miller says:

    here is to hoping decay does not set in as our skin begins to sag….ha…nice opening lines and an interesting build from there…

  13. Intriguing sense of risque in this one!

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