sun slits days first sky,

morning sweet as unbitten candy,

sidewalk warm with evaporating

stains of rain,

moving to the car in the lot

metal warm contours

windows open,

radio interrupted silence

news bisects my mind

shootings, loss, agony, fire

emotive stackup for the day,

early congestion everywhere

car noses prominent

pushed as bows on blacktop,

juddering in lines

with nominal spurts of speed,

instead of frustration

my breath became clear

so i would not fog the windows,

would she be waking

what first thoughts,

it did not matter

cellphone switched off

work would not be expecting

me either,

elements of freedom began to encroach,

if only the traffic moved faster

human tide most offensive,

we live under burden and pressure

uniting physical and metaphysical,

other faces stared ahead

bluetooth headsets flickering

nobody smiled

grey faced stream,

gazing from one car to another

inhaling fumes through a/c

how desperate it seemed,

even music could not alter this

monotonous mass,

i was part of this

humanity as a whole,

to depart from all this

would i become a monster.

In response to http://dailypost.wordpress.com/2012/08/17/weekly-photo-challenge-merge/#respond working on a theme of MERGE

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Comments
  1. ~Lady Day says:

    really great work.

  2. Nice! Clarity of vision showing us the haze of modern, urban humanity. There was a creepy undertone to this that made me think of that old movie “Falling Down”. Excellent!

  3. elisabetta beneforti says:

    so beautifull so clear
    nice to meet you

  4. slpmartin says:

    Brought to mind watching drivers along the LA freeways…excellent images within the poem.

  5. Hi, I have never read your work before but I am glad that I came across it today! This is perfectly written and evoking. I can ‘see’ and I can ‘hear’ and ‘feel’. Poetry has never much been my thing (apart from when I started here at WP and wrote 3!), I am really taken aback by this piece – in a great way – that is some powerful stuff.

    Lovely to meet you :-) And greetings from myself! :-)

  6. go1flo says:

    Enchanting work.

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