Borders With Snow

Posted: September 23, 2012 in Uncategorized
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a storm brought cold,

an everlasting damp

to those corners you hide in

for warmth only to find them

not so secure,

they had climbed for an hour

back to the checkpoint,

road quiet

having to remain and

be vigilant,

headlights pushed the edges of dark,

the two soldiers moved forward,

bolts in position

rifles held ready,

far from barracks and city,

they could be trapped by the snow

that now fell,

old station wagon slowed,

pointing rifles

elderly man placed arm across the

chest of his wife,

simple protection,

one guard shook his head

nodding to the rear,

inside bundles of cloth husks of corn

simple trade,

snow began to increase

thickening on everything it fell

they could make it difficult for them

to prolong a stress and threat

but no,

cold quickly made them compassionate

and as the pick up left,

felt as though they had done right


  1. cait says:

    Nice! It had a nice balanced feel as I read and I enjoyed the story, brief though it was.

    stopping by from write at the merge!

  2. Cameron says:

    I read twice to really dig into it. There’s certainly more going on than the initial read reveals. Thanks for linking up with Write on Edge!

  3. Bee says:

    I love lines 20-22, such simple gesture that says so much.

  4. Annabelle says:

    Lovely. I like that the poem takes the tension in a different direction than you’d expect; those moments are important too.

  5. hypercryptical says:

    A story well told.

    Anna :o]

  6. brenda w says:

    Wonderful work, Chris. It reminds me of the story/movie A Midnight Clear. Even in war time opposing sides show compassion for one another. People are people…the good and the bad. I enoyed this write a great deal. Thank you.

  7. Clench and release. wonderful poem, Chris.

  8. I liked this poem. If you’d like to read a serialized novel (500 wds/week) just take a peek at . Many blessings and good wishes.

  9. vbholmes says:

    The cynic in me has to ask: any chance there were explosives under the top layer of corn husks?

  10. JulesPaige says:

    …and yet my mind reverses course and thinks about what the elder couple could be hiding. Being a solider in any time, especially in a tense situation tends to not be poetic and yet you have transformed it so.

    My wordle is here:

  11. MaliniKadir says:

    grips your thoughts with tension……..then eases away ever so simple and matter of fact way///NICE!

  12. seingraham says:

    Well wordled – you built up a tense situation and let us down with a poetic gentleness that was lovely …nice

  13. Coco O says:

    Hi clawfish, lovely to read someone with a passion for poetry.
    Thanks too for following my brand new blog, Tarzana Is My Heroine, all the way from England! You’re my second follower, after my best friend’s kid brother!

  14. 4joy says:

    a story full of tension and excitement, and I sure did enjoy reading it….

  15. go1flo says:

    That is certainly beautiful.

  16. slpmartin says:

    The poem conveys the story and emotions very IMHO.

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