Waiting In Line

Posted: September 29, 2012 in Uncategorized
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frosted lens one secret eye,

it’s time almost gone,

other vibrant blue watery,

she waited to be served

packaged meals enough for

a few days,

tremors with age

cellular collapse,

life’s abrupt stoop to spine,

coat drawn snug,

cold reaches more easily

through mottled paper,

her turn,

trolley a support to feet

more unsteady than an infant,

red leather handbag

leather fashion for forty years

cracked and glazed,

pleased to talk to the assistant

juddering conversation,

sprawled out topics of conversation

no linear trail,

topics of weather,

her husband passed twenty years,

lack of pension,

always broke,

children dispersed seed unconnected

and when she was younger

flew planes in the Pacific

a job few knew of,

no government medal,

yet she offered her life

as she did now to survival,

gnarled arthritic hands

struggled with notes and coins

tomorrow a fragile



  1. The Enfant Terrible says:

    This is so poignant! A tragic story and one which I know intimately from those around me. Thanks for sharing.

  2. David King says:

    Nicely crafted. You flesh her out with some skill.

  3. Grace says:

    Nice capture of her life, past and present ~ It makes me sad to see her fragile and broken ~

  4. brudberg says:

    Fantastic story. A little sad, but still a fulfilled life.

  5. danadampier says:

    Wow, I feel as if I know her… I can see her in my mind. What a wonderful lady.

  6. hypercryptical says:

    Really sad story of something that is all to common – why do we allow this and fail to realise that we too will be old some day…

    Thank you for this wonderul but sad write.

    Anna :o]

  7. Mary says:

    Heart-breaking. So much changes for an individual over the years, doesn’t it? She once flew planes over the Pacific. Look at her now! Who knows what the future holds for any of us?

  8. A very sad and real situation. Nice write.

  9. slpmartin says:

    A complete portrait created with such fine precision of words.

  10. Gosh, the details here – that well-loved handbag brought a lump to my throat.

  11. 5oh9 says:

    Reblogged this on 5oh9.

  12. brian miller says:

    wow…she is quite the survivor and you captured her life story a bit in this…really cool on your descriptions…i can see her…the paper coat as well…i bet she could tell a story or two you know…

  13. claudia says:

    oh i love how you capture her and you even give us a deeper glimpse into her story…

  14. mobius faith says:

    Some really well written visual images here. It’s like I can “see” what your writing about.

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