barren waste of unkempt heart
tuber entwined to succulent earth
tongue laments tangible bite
resonant i go we part
a poem for @dVersePoets in the englyn proest form which is a Cornish structure one i have not used before and experiment with
barren waste of unkempt heart
tuber entwined to succulent earth
tongue laments tangible bite
resonant i go we part
a poem for @dVersePoets in the englyn proest form which is a Cornish structure one i have not used before and experiment with
velvetmedia 
There’s a twist and a shock to this and I enjoyed it.
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Great metaphor …great use of words here;)
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Point well made; and well written to form.
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Thank you Mary
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Liking it lots
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Bruce thank you again
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OOOPS, nevermind..
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Similar to Haiku, but in a 7-9-7-9 syllable format?
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like a Cornish or Breton Haiku yes interesting the different forms it can take
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your cadence and diction are pleasing, melodic.
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Ooh… this is great… your first line will stick with me for a long time.
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Laurie thank you hope all is well
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nice….cool turn with the first two lines…from the heart to the tuber…parting is not much fun under the best of circumstances…..nice job on the form as well…
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Brian thank you my friend
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short and sweet with a pleasant lingering aftertaste.
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