we are among the ruins

and could return to life again,

it was their natural atmosphere

not daunted by either art or ideal politics

out in the open world,

she could use her sexuality to have power over him,

her orgasm and her crisis

amazing, the profound

fulfilled before they knew promise

a vibrating thrill inside the body

and the soul she could not get rid of,

succumbed to the strange male power

a well bred social anarchy

one of the curious obsolete,

she went by without looking at them,

alone he was a lost thing

whole act took place in a vacuum,

why should they last

with layers of dissolution

like geological strata,

sideways, and downwards the light fell on him

he was burningly, poignantly grateful for these

pieces of natural

as was his outcast soul,

they lit the candles in the hall

of unfinished tender flesh


an erasure poem derived from a novel that caused much controversy D H Lawrence Lady Chatterlys Lover

  1. go1flo says:

    Truly great work.

  2. Sorry I missed your submission in the first go round but am so glad I subscribe so I can see it now 🙂 Even though it’s an erasure poem, it reads like an original poem. Good poem.

  3. Wow, I just reread this book and you capture its heat and social commentary so well in your poem. In addition you managed to illuminate the intimacy of the characters and keep important characterization. Very impressive!

  4. janehewey says:

    this comes together wonderfully. I was enrapt while reading.

  5. brian miller says:

    why should they last

    with layers of dissolution

    like geological strata,….nice….he said burningly…ha….fun paring down sir…smiles.

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