$50 Afterglow

Posted: July 17, 2012 in Uncategorized
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apartment small and tidy,

stood by window,

tried wiping it to catch a

sunrise,

grease, breath of a thousand

lovers

skin cells too

gave thick reptilian scaliness

to glass,

digging nails in would not

scrape away,

feeling the grease

texture of other men who had

lain with her,

burdened her with marital

failings

domination and sadness,

this is what remained,

a scar of orange broke through

not wanting to place face too close,

behind she sighed flesh peppered

in goosebumps,

heating not on

could he leave just yet,

feeling sun burning blue of his

eyes it stung yet could not pull

away.

 

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Comments
  1. mypenandme says:

    I have nominated you for the One Lovely Blog Award. To view, please visit my blog at: http://mypenandme.wordpress.com/2012/07/24/one-lovely-blog-award-3/

  2. zongrik says:

    we stand at windows at our great hours of loneliness. i guess we need to be there if something better arrives.

  3. There is an embedded humanity in this, his not wanting to leave, his either imagining or knowing her life (probably the latter). The grease of men/skin cells detritus on the window comments on the inner lives of both. Extremely strong stuff, Chris. Had a hard time finding your blog, but WOW. In admiration, Amy

  4. naramalone says:

    lLike how you use the dirty exterior and a window to the outside to show us their insides. Beautifully crafted.

  5. yoga-adan says:

    extremely touching, and glad the person at the window appears to be feeling it

    “feeling the grease

    texture of other men who had

    lain with her,

    burdened her”

    very very touching, thank you chris

  6. ManicDdaily says:

    Kind of awful, but very well written. k.

  7. Louise says:

    Somehow sad, this slice of life…I love the ending…”feeling sun burning blue of his

    eyes it stung yet could not pull

    away.” 🙂

  8. Claudia says:

    i think most wouldn’t really care..glad he does…before he walks out.. a bit of humanity..i like

  9. Grace says:

    The sensation of touch is very evident here…the breath of a thousand lovers, grease of men who had lain with her, burdening her with marital failings….very well done ~

    http://everydayamazin.blogspot.ca/2012/07/my-journey.html

  10. brian miller says:

    wow…nicelayering in this…like the layers you peal away of all those that came to her before you and by the end now maybe you are just the next but there is hope…maybe…

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