Transcript of The Brilliance

Posted: September 18, 2012 in Uncategorized
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forget the outer air

that gathered as horses tread light,

lost to vanished ships,

all heart cast off as blossom fallen,

stammering voices lift over clearing

to an eagles satisfied self,

down in the orchards,

bird ghosts eat berries,

with wisdom and wildflower alchemy

she who has cold tears

and heart louder than thunder,

faced of washed stone

spoke with a low voice,

words lifted pain excising with precision

poison extracted no gauze to cover,

his tremors would be related in long

writing of a notebook,

where his heartfelts are mentioned in

great detail,

no crimson match could set it on fire,

only if she abandoned him

but first he was cleansed,

washing away remnants in rolling brook

her teeth showed on each shoulder,

memory thick as ink

went past the length of what tomorrow

would bring,

this would be written well,

loin and flank had ripeness of sacrifice,

hues of the soul

left him as a scattered person

for her to pick up from the rug of the

earth,

in that methodical way,

complete again would be left there

automatic and ageless,

a life for her to own

and to kiss as if of steel.

 

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Comments
  1. Mary says:

    I felt the darkness in this poem…a strong write with lots of effective images such as this one:

    “hues of the soul

    left him as a scattered person

    for her to pick up from the rug of the

    earth,”

    Nice write!

  2. ayala says:

    Great lines…this would be written well,

    loin and flank had ripeness of sacrifice,

    hues of the soul

    left him as a scattered person

    for her to pick up from the rug of the

    earth,

  3. brian miller says:

    oy. have felt the breaking before and being scattered…i like the touch of steel there in the end…made me think of iron sharpening iron, which is not always comfortable…also like the writing of the notebook as well gathering the thoughts and emotions…it made me attach to the story and made it more alive for me…

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