Kelly Lune
#1
waitress waits nearby
watches close
as coffee turns cold
#2
bitter winter sea
crawls on sand
watched by my old eyes
#3
my penis a coiled shrew
unsure now
of nights intention
#4
deeper goes the night
arc of moon
as one last whisper
#5
lobbyist fed fat
corpulent senate stride
all devil may care
#6
tv is not watched
unseen love
as i have crumbled
Collum Lune
#1
once its said
breath caught by pale indifference
my moment gone
#2
saturns many rings
given in wedlock to you
abstract stars collide
#3
war no solution
as to hungers angry stride
crops not guns
#4
you are secret
concealed by my winter poem
i only know
#5
cast long shadow
burnished by low copper sun
cooling my ardor
#6
blue painted walls
advertisement paled and nearly gone
i was here
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Thanks Simon
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KL
one: …the waiting’s getting too long… quite sad to make a coffee cold…
two: …stunning scene as watched by thine old eyes… But too much of such scene could make one longs for a more lively act…
three: …entertainingly clever…
four: …i felt this… in many many nights… always has a unique tone of whispers just before my final surrender of the night…
five: …a bit of politics in there… hitting one or two or more…
six: …quite intriguing…i think of absence…
CL
one: …gives a thought of loosing somethin’… An opportunity or event i guess…
two: …well more than one’s too many for a rejection..
three: …clever proposal… especially in 3rd world…
four: …quite sad that there are none that knows far better than its poet… but i’d like to hover and drink your secret/s…
five: …quite a companion, yes…
six: …and me too…
…no..i seemed to like ’em all… Great offering Chris… Smiles…
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Thank you so much for the comments i loved that you went through each one , all the best
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less is more. i like the short verses.
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Thank you Martina
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I liked all of them. It is amazing sometimes how much wisdom can be written in short verse. Of the first set, my favorites are 1, 4, and 6. In the second set, 1 and 4. Very fine lunes here.
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Thanks Mary i am glad you liked
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dang you really embraced this as well…and took it across the topics…i like the political one in the first part….ha, had not seen someone use it for that yet…
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Thanks Brian you never know what you are going to get with me
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When I said we shouldn’t expect a large number of lunes, I didn’t expect that some would rise to the challenge, as you have. A good breadth of themes in this collection, a testament to the versatility of the form!
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Thank you Samuel i enjoyed working within the form it was interesting i know some are stronger than others but i always appreciate comments and i am glad you liked all the best
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I enjoyed the various lunes specially this :
deeper goes the night
arc of moon
as one last whisper
The no. 3 made me giggle 🙂
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Thanks Grace i am glad you liked and also No 3 gave you a giggle , hope all is well
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Had to laugh at Kelly #3! I really like them all, but especially like #2 of both versions.
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Glad #3 gave you a laugh and thank you for your comments always welcome
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nice..i like your range of topics here…even political…very cool snapshots chris
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Thanks Claudia hope all is good for you in 2013
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I enjoyed reading your lunes. There’s quite a variety here!
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Thanks Tony for stopping by
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you are secret
concealed by my winter poem
i only know
I so much love this.
I say the same to my guy every night I guess 🙂
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I am glad it felt truthful to you and liked hope all is well
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