sun slits days first sky,
morning sweet as unbitten candy,
sidewalk warm with evaporating
stains of rain,
moving to the car in the lot
metal warm contours
windows open,
radio interrupted silence
news bisects my mind
shootings, loss, agony, fire
emotive stackup for the day,
early congestion everywhere
car noses prominent
pushed as bows on blacktop,
juddering in lines
with nominal spurts of speed,
instead of frustration
my breath became clear
so i would not fog the windows,
would she be waking
what first thoughts,
it did not matter
cellphone switched off
work would not be expecting
me either,
elements of freedom began to encroach,
if only the traffic moved faster
human tide most offensive,
we live under burden and pressure
uniting physical and metaphysical,
other faces stared ahead
bluetooth headsets flickering
nobody smiled
grey faced stream,
gazing from one car to another
inhaling fumes through a/c
how desperate it seemed,
even music could not alter this
monotonous mass,
i was part of this
humanity as a whole,
to depart from all this
would i become a monster.
In response to http://dailypost.wordpress.com/2012/08/17/weekly-photo-challenge-merge/#respond working on a theme of MERGE
really great work.
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Nice! Clarity of vision showing us the haze of modern, urban humanity. There was a creepy undertone to this that made me think of that old movie “Falling Down”. Excellent!
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so beautifull so clear
nice to meet you
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So nice to meet you and thank you for visiting
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Brought to mind watching drivers along the LA freeways…excellent images within the poem.
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Hi, I have never read your work before but I am glad that I came across it today! This is perfectly written and evoking. I can ‘see’ and I can ‘hear’ and ‘feel’. Poetry has never much been my thing (apart from when I started here at WP and wrote 3!), I am really taken aback by this piece – in a great way – that is some powerful stuff.
Lovely to meet you 🙂 And greetings from myself! 🙂
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Hello Imogen and wonderful to meet you as well and thank you for your warmth and big greetings from me
Chris
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Enchanting work.
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